Sunday, 26 August 2018

Smirk or Squirm Session 2



  1. I went to school in Pekanbaru since kindergaten to junior high but i finished my highschool in Solo.
  2. I’ve always consider myself an outgoing person, the ones that always try to get to know everyone around before they even introduce their selves.
  3. Thats a big difference, but it will make Mr Adrian (our english-writing teacher) lives easier
  4. Last year I’ve studied during one semester overseas. I’ve really enjoyed this experience that’s why I chose to come to Indonesia this year. 
  5. I also play jazz piano so it makes me even more appreciate jazz.
  6. I have 2 siblings; one older sister and one younger brother. 
  7. Since I was born, my father have taught me different type of sports, especialy martial arts.
  8. I have a lot of hobbies, such as watching movies, listening to music, play sports, and also reading novels.
  9. I lived most of my childhood in America for seven years.
  10. Before I will write a lot, let me introduce myself.
                  Think about each one for a moment before checking my corrected versions of them in the comments below.


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                  10 comments:

                  1. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:42

                    BEFORE: I went to school in Pekanbaru since kindergaten to junior high but i finished my highschool in Solo.

                    AFTER: I went to school in Pekanbaru from kindergarten to junior high but I finished my high school in Solo.

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                  2. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:43

                    BEFORE: I’ve always consider myself an outgoing person, the ones that always try to get to know everyone around before they even introduce their selves.

                    AFTER: I’ve always considered myself an outgoing person who always tries to get to know everyone around before they even introduce themselves.

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                  3. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:44

                    BEFORE: Thats a big difference, but it will make Mr Adrian (our english-writing teacher) lives easier

                    AFTER: That's a big difference, but it will make Mr Adrian's life easier.

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                  4. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:45

                    BEFORE: Last year I’ve studied during one semester overseas. I’ve really enjoyed this experience that’s why I chose to come to Indonesia this year.

                    AFTER: Last year, I studied for one semester overseas. I really enjoyed this experience and that’s why I chose to come to Indonesia this year.

                    ReplyDelete
                  5. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:46

                    BEFORE: I also play jazz piano so it makes me even more appreciate jazz.

                    AFTER [1]: I also play jazz piano so it makes me appreciate jazz even more.

                    AFTER [2]: I also play jazz piano so it makes me even more appreciative of jazz.

                    ReplyDelete
                  6. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:46

                    BEFORE: I have 2 siblings; one older sister and one younger brother.

                    AFTER: I have two siblings: one older sister and one younger brother.

                    ReplyDelete
                  7. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:47

                    BEFORE: Since I was born, my father have taught me different type of sports, especialy martial arts.

                    AFTER: Since I was little my father has taught me different types of sports, especialy martial arts.

                    ReplyDelete
                  8. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:48

                    BEFORE: I have a lot of hobbies, such as watching movies, listening to music, play sports, and also reading novels.

                    AFTER: I have a lot of hobbies, such as watching movies, listening to music, playing sports, and also reading novels.

                    ReplyDelete
                  9. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:49

                    BEFORE: I lived most of my childhood in America for seven years.

                    AFTER [1]: I lived most of my childhood in America.

                    AFTER [2]: I lived in America for seven years (when I was a child).

                    ReplyDelete
                  10. Adrian26 August 2018 at 19:50

                    BEFORE: Before I will write a lot, let me introduce myself.

                    AFTER: Before I write a lot, let me introduce myself.

                    ReplyDelete

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