Sunday, 2 September 2018

Smirk or Squirm Session 3


  1. I’m looking forward to every changes that will bring me into a better person because my personal motto is live to learn and learn to live.
  2. Speaking about attitudes, i don't have any special criteria that makes me stood out differently than the others
  3. My another hobby is listening to music because of that I like to organize a music event.
  4. My hobby is travelling and I ever went to several countries in Asia and some cities in Indonesia.
  5. I can’t speak both Javanese and Sundanese, which is something that I’m not proud of.
  6. I was born in Shiga prefecture, Japan about 20 years ago
  7. After approximately one year, I able to speak Chinese quite good.

7 comments:

  1. BEFORE: I’m looking forward to every changes that will bring me into a better person because my personal motto is live to learn and learn to live.

    AFTER: I’m looking forward to every change that will turn [or make] me into a better person because my personal motto is "live to learn and learn to live".

    ReplyDelete
  2. BEFORE: Speaking about attitudes, i don't have any special criteria that makes me stood out differently than the others

    AFTER: Speaking about attitudes, I don't have any special criteria that make me stand out from the others.

    ReplyDelete
  3. BEFORE: My another hobby is listening to music because of that I like to organize a music event.

    AFTER: My other hobby is listening to music. Because of that, I like to organize music events.

    or

    AFTER: Another hobby is listening to music. Because of that, I like to organize music events.

    ReplyDelete
  4. BEFORE: My hobby is travelling and I ever went to several countries in Asia and some cities in Indonesia.

    AFTER: My hobby is travelling and I have been to several countries in Asia and some cities in Indonesia.

    ReplyDelete
  5. BEFORE: I can’t speak both Javanese and Sundanese, which is something that I’m not proud of.

    AFTER: I can speak neither Javanese nor Sundanese, which is something that I’m not proud of.

    or

    AFTER: I can’t speak either Javanese or Sundanese, which is something that I’m not proud of.

    ReplyDelete
  6. BEFORE: I was born in Shiga prefecture, Japan about 20 years ago

    AFTER: I was born in Shiga prefecture in Japan 20 years ago.

    ReplyDelete
  7. BEFORE: After approximately one year, I able to speak Chinese quite good.

    AFTER: After approximately one year, I am able to speak Chinese quite well.

    Or even better...

    AFTER: After approximately one year, I was able to speak Chinese quite well.

    ReplyDelete