Smirk or Squirm Session 4
- In urban cities in Indonesia, it is common to married late.
- As seen on the statistics given on the article above, more women tend to get married later in the Asian countries.
- What Mr. Guanlao does is very generous and inspiring. What he does needed to be appreciated and praised.
- Women who live in a big city are tend to desire to get a higher education at least until she acquired her bachelor degree before thinking of getting married.
- From the article above there are a couple of points, I would like to point out.
- Marriage in most cultures was perceived as a social obligation as social pressure also played an important role in marriage.
- Talk about marriage for me it’s actually personal preference about when u want to marry, cause some people that I’ve met before who marry late most of them are pursuing their career first because they think they don’t want to marry when they still don’t have job or enough money, but in Indonesia if you marry late it’s kinda strange because people will give a point of view that you are don’t want to marry or either a perfectionist or even not a normal person, marrying someone is a total commitment that you want to spend the rest of your life with the person you want, for some people this is a heavy problem since the cant find or choose a person exactly like they want, so if you feel you cant find the best one its okay to marry late because if you marry because of a deadline from your parents of course you don’t want ended in divorce, so for me every human have right to decide when or with who they want to marry
BEFORE: In urban cities in Indonesia, it is common to married late.
ReplyDeleteAFTER: In cities in Indonesia, it is common to get married late.
Or... In urban areas in Indonesia, it is common to get married late.
Also possible: to get married = to marry
BEFORE: As seen on the statistics given on the article above, more women tend to get married later in the Asian countries.
ReplyDeleteAFTER: As seen from the statistics given in the article above, women tend to get married later in Asian countries.
BEFORE: What Mr. Guanlao does is very generous and inspiring. What he does needed to be appreciated and praised.
ReplyDeleteAFTER: (one possibility) What Mr. Guanlao does is very generous and inspiring and it needs to be appreciated and praised.
BEFORE: Women who live in a big city are tend to desire to get a higher education at least until she acquired her bachelor degree before thinking of getting married.
ReplyDeleteAFTER: Women who live in a big city tend to desire to get a higher education, at least until they acquire their bachelor degrees, before thinking of getting married.
BEFORE: From the article above there are a couple of points, I would like to point out.
ReplyDeleteAFTER: From the article above, there are a couple of points I would like to discuss.
Or... From the article above, there are a couple of things I would like to point out.
BEFORE: Marriage in most cultures was perceived as a social obligation as social pressure also played an important role in marriage.
ReplyDeleteAFTER: (including an improvement to what it is actually saying!) Marriage in most cultures was perceived as a social obligation and this pressure also played an important role in determining how young women were when they got married.
BEFORE: Talk about marriage for me it’s actually personal preference about when u want to marry, cause some people that I’ve met before who marry late most of them are pursuing their career first because they think they don’t want to marry when they still don’t have job or enough money, but in Indonesia if you marry late it’s kinda strange because people will give a point of view that you are don’t want to marry or either a perfectionist or even not a normal person, marrying someone is a total commitment that you want to spend the rest of your life with the person you want, for some people this is a heavy problem since the cant find or choose a person exactly like they want, so if you feel you cant find the best one its okay to marry late because if you marry because of a deadline from your parents of course you don’t want ended in divorce, so for me every human have right to decide when or with who they want to marry
ReplyDeleteAFTER: Talking about marriage, for me it’s actually a personal preference as to when you want to marry because most people that I’ve met who married late are pursuing their careers first because they think they don’t want to marry when they still don’t have job or enough money. However, in Indonesia, if you marry late it’s seen as rather strange because people will have a point of view that you don’t want to marry or you are a perfectionist or even that you are not a normal person. Marrying someone is a total commitment meaning you want to spend the rest of your life with a person. For some people, this is a big problem since they can't find or choose a person who is exactly like they want. So, if you feel you can't find the right one, it's okay to marry late because, if you marry because of a deadline from your parents, of course, you don’t want to end in divorce. So, for me, every person has the right to decide when or with whom they want to marry.